I think you should think about improving a bit more! Learning more strategy in music would be good for you! At 00:39...wasn't good at all. It was all random notes, and not very catchy. At 1:08 sounded very cool. But then at 1:22 was weird. 3=
Also this is more video game music then Dance music...dance music does not have that drum beat. ALL dance songs have a kick, clap and hi hat beat. Kick in 4 beat, clap in 2 beat etc. The beat is called an off beat, which is off the bass. The bass is also wrong in this song...the bass needs to be a 2 bar then 2 spaced and 2 bar again. And that is what makes people move. Also, japan melody's are more with black keys then the white keys. They use some white keys that makes it sound like Japanese music.
Overall, you really should improve with dance music. YouTube has tutorials of how it was suppose to be formatted. Even if you like it, and thought it sounded pretty, doesn't make it professional. Professional dance music is formatted correctly and has a outline of organization. I really thought this song was very unorganized. Which was how I first started out making music! Please take my advice, and I hope it helps!